Chapter 7 - p35


January 28, 2013, at 12:08 AM

Watch where you're walkin', girl.

Due to popular demand I'm extending the fanfiction contest deadline one week. You now have through February 8th to get your story to me. I've received eleven entries so far - thanks to all the talented people who have submitted! :) You guys are mindblowing.

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Comments

  1. holy crap. D: reminds me of the stay puft marshmallow man. DX nightmarefuel.
    ivylee on
  2. If the light side is freaking her out, she's gonna get scarred by the dark side.
    FeeBee on
  3. I don't think you wanna go that way, Sette.
    Kyuohki on
  4. Poor Sette. I would be freaking out as well if I fell into someone's shadow and ended up in a ghost world full of disproportionate animals.
    Afan on
  5. Sette, when you get lost you are supposed to hug a tree and not wander off into some acid forest with demon monkeys.
    Humming-fly on
  6. Wow. Reminds me of the dreams I had after staying up for 4 days straight back in the Marines. When you get to catch up on your REM... it can get spooky.
    Desipak on
  7. Yyyäk! That monkey thing! D: I really feel sorry for Sette.
    Kikioh on
  8. I keep forgetting about the dang contest! I started working on something ages ago then forgot about it, but I really want to enter, so I'm super glad you extended the deadline! On another note, you seem like you're really enjoying these pages XD It's probably a pain, but getting to come up with those creepy dudes is probably a blast :p
    S on
  9. While I initially really appreciated this sequence, it's starting to feel a bit drawn out, to be honest. I hope the next page has some plot moving forward.
    Not a name on
  10. Fleshturtle is not Duane. Fleshturtle is confused.
    AsimovSideburns on
  11. Sette now knows what the inside of Dr. Seuss' mind looks like.
    Squid on
  12. I'm gonna take a wild guess and say, that maybe this is where Sette is from. I mean, according to everyone, she's some sort of mutant, she's the only one who seems to have a tail and sharp teeth, plus the fact that some claim she's not the true heiress to her father's domain, that she's not truly his daughter. Maybe her Da' created her through magic? And maybe that's why she feels she's been there before. I feel it's something similar to that.
    Giush on
  13. "Nomnomnom, my hand is deLICious!"
    JimB on
  14. I had the exact same thought, JimB!
    LapisKelinia on
  15. So, I'm gonna go ahead and throw out *my* guess, and I'm sure someone else has thought this... I'm guessing that Sette is *inside the khert*?
    McFerocious on
  16. It is a giant manatee made of puffs.
    Some Chick on
  17. first time someone drew an accurate depiction of warp
    bob on
  18. I concur with "Not a name".
    Some dude on
  19. Have patience, "Not a name"! Trust Ashley to handle the pacing right. Some parts of a story just need to build. In retrospect, I'm sure you'll see that there's not a wasted panel -- every part of this is necessary. (But, poor Sette! She is still, after all, a little girl. A very scared little girl, right now. And I think she has good reason to be scared. This is not, not even slightly, a safe place.)
    Sessine on
  20. Although I too wish to concur with "Not a Name," it's only been 7 pages that Sette's been inside this lovely new world. Things always seem to be drawn out when you're initially following it, but I feel like the pacing might be just right?
    Riven on
  21. She's stuck in the Akashic plane, having a bad OOBE.
    jim on
  22. All the snakes back when Duane was going crazy over his kill dived down INTO his shadow. So now Sette's fallen there as well...
    Kara on
  23. i feel a duane back story fast approching
    lilyote on
  24. The amount of nasty in that place is pretty off the scale. I wonder if it just the way it is -or- things that enter/sacrificial stuff gets all twisted in it. Like that bloody monkey thing.
    on
  25. Be more concerned with the eyes in the middle-top of the bottom panel as Sette's On that thing's tail.
    Crestlinger on
  26. Plot twist: Sette wakes up, having been walked in a hallucination-trance thing, all the way back to Sharteshane by a really peeved Duane. Develops acute phobia of ravens and monkeys.
    Kathy on
  27. GIANT INTESTINE MONKEY DRAGON BLAAARGH
    Patrick on
  28. .... February 8th? Damm... I could of written more. Ah well, I hope you enjoy it anyway. I'm excited to read the other fan fictions.
    Shiko on
  29. Aw. I want to enter the fanfiction contest so bad, but I'm terrible at writing. I have characters and backstories, but when it comes to actually writing something, I draw a blank. Every time the deadline is extended, I think, "I'm going to enter it!" But then when I actually try, nothing comes out. :( Oh, well. I'm sure I'll enjoy reading everybody else's.

    As for the comic, I think I can see where Not A Name is coming from, but I don't agree. It does feel like it's been a while since something happened, but I think part of that is just the nature of webcomics (as well as anticipation for where this particular comic is going to go from here. Impatience makes the wait longer). I'm enjoying the current sequence, though, especially the monsters.
    FTL on
  30. Don't be discouraged, FTL. If you've got some good ideas locked up in your noggin, it'd be a waste not to express them. As a fellow contestant, my best method is to close off all external stimuli and just force myself to write. Just babble onto the page as much as your fingers can type and don't worry about it making sense. That's what editing is for! :)
    Rasputin on
  31. The third and fourth panels are simply drool-worthy.
    Ditty on
  32. Why did a dark, blood drinking god know Sette's name? What did it just say, anyway?
    Jim on
  33. Somebody had a twin and somebody was forced to watch a sacrifice. Was it Sete? Was it Duane? That's what I'm guessing. Hi, I've finally stopped lurking . . .
    awhorl on
  34. Beautiful and bloody terrifying at the same time. This is what acid probably feels like eh.
    Elmion on
  35. I really want to see Duane back. The actual character, not the zombie mindless version. It's kind of irritating. You started the series off with excellent characters and an interesting idea as a hook, and then descended into introducing more and more progressively less interesting characters. Which wouldn't really be a problem at all if you hadn't completely eliminated the character that got me reading this in the first place. Don't get me wrong, Unsounded is good, and I'm not trying to be offensive. I just can't bring myself to care about most of the newer characters, they're just not that interesting. Besides Quigley, he's alright. I mean, at least Sette is still around, but the most entertaining part of her character was the interaction between her and Duane, and that's missing now.
    Isaac on
  36. Hello, Ashley - In the midst of those that are criticizing this story, I wanted to let you know that I follow your comic regularly. If I were to read this page by page only and never go back to read the comic through, I would agree that not every page on its own has provided interesting dialogue or new developments. However, I personally find this a function of reading something such as this page by page week by week. Rereading this as a coherent whole from time to time reminds me that you seem to have a wonderful plot and plan in place. :) Thank you for the good work you do! I look forward to reading more!
    Alcyone on
  37. Whilst the phrase "haters gonna hate" is non-productive and the wise artist/creator/etc will always hear the things worth listening to in the tripe spewed at them daily, I wish to tell the people who are unabashedly WHINING about the comic to kindly be quiet, or learn to express their criticism in ways that are less offensive and don't make them sound like entitled snot-nosed teens who can't seem to get it through their heads that they're reading something of very high caliber that they should, by all rights, be paying top dollar for in a bookstore. /bottled rage
    Chajiko on
  38. @Chajiko No one has been whining, at all, outside of yourself? I expressed my criticism fairly reasonablely, I would think, unless your skin is thinner than a butterfly's wings. Some people agreed with me. No one has whined. Take a step back from the bottle and breathe some fresh air instead. Nothing is perfect, criticism is helpful.
    Not a name on
  39. I actually like the plot flow. (glimpse of darkness, blood, then the walk into the greater darkness) Wonder what the darkness holds and what it looks like. Better yet, who else lives in this place? Yeah zombie monkey thing!
    glug on
  40. Perhaps you are unaware of the effect of your rhetoric--how foolish I was to think that the point-of-view of an outside observer might make you reconsider how your criticism of an artistic work which you are reading for -free- might be taken by other intelligent, articulate people. By all means, please continue to imply that I am a whiney, hysterical alcoholic! It's ever so charming.
    Chajiko on
  41. Woah!!! There ARE eyes hiding in the dark bushes. Remind me of Duane for some reason(or Lady Ilganyag), but not... And Holy shit, I nevr noticed screeching gutstrung monkey is HOLDING the missing hand-eeewww!. Ya knowwww, that money expression looks a LOT like that restrained critter from the guard's cardiac pymaric... Or maybe just pain = pain on the face of anything anthropomorphized? ouchy=sad:( Crazeee stuff all!
    jryk on
  42. Oh Nooeees- conflict in the comments!!!...pokin fun at everyone! Ya gotta please your personal muse before ya please everyone else! you GO girlie! The longtimers/formspringers know AC is no newbie to commentary. I think she would prefer people speak their mind. She's UNBREAKABLE, rock it! ~JO:)
    jryk on
  43. @Chajiko Delayed response, probably won't even see it: The bottle part was referring to your own admission of having bottled rage. It was a tongue in cheek comment. Calm thyself. Some people. Your arrogance can be felt through the screen.
    Not a name on
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